ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 23:52:11 GMT -5
Is not much, though...
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 23:52:45 GMT -5
i like what you added- it shows that he's somewhat on to her and noticing the weird behavior. which is good because it is like, a 40 something year old facing off wits with a 16 year old. he's not stupid
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 23:56:14 GMT -5
Btw:I love that you love the army line^^ How´s the pov after the rain so far?
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 23:58:18 GMT -5
It's good enough because you have the thougt train worked up. one thing is to, now that you have that out of the way, frustrating as it may be, you have something to think about to build on. Now, what kind of timeline are we looking to have them stuck on this world before the start of the fic and the finale? And what questions/requests do you have of me regarding the fic?
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:03:03 GMT -5
First of all I wanted to arrange the scene after the rain, in her bedroom(so we don´t have to correct any eventual references that might come after)...I´ll need to know how exactly is the next mission(in which storm dies) if I want to hint at it in the pov after she cries(since you gave the idea that he knew what the mission was) I´ll finish the after the rain pov tomorrow, and take care of this one one later. After we get the reference, do you think one or two povs each will be anough to get it done?
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Post by Bastet on Aug 3, 2006 0:03:17 GMT -5
Btw:I love that you love the army line^^ How´s the pov after the rain so far? I like it because you're showing me Remy's misgivings, not necessarily drowning in guilt, but showing what's in his head of the situation past his guilt. She's like his wife, but he knows she isn't and suddenly, despite all else, that's not necessarily a bad thing. He can never have Stormy back again (i'll just call the wife that). At the same time, you explain that he's not ready to show Ororo he cares about her. you might want to allude he thinks she still considers this a game. As childish as it may seem, he doesn't want her to know he cares (if anything, he could be scared that once she gets what she wants, she'll leave). I dunno- kind of a warped sense of how the game is playing out (plays upon the who's pulling whose strings) and in essence, making him the ochestrator. I dunno, just theories.
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Post by Bastet on Aug 3, 2006 0:05:25 GMT -5
First of all I wanted to arrange the scene after the rain, in her bedroom(so we don´t have to correct any eventual references that might come after)...I´ll need to know how exactly is the next mission(in which storm dies) if I want to hint at it in the pov after she cries(since you gave the idea that he knew what the mission was) I´ll finish the after the rain pov tomorrow, and take care of this one one later. After we get the reference, do you think one or two povs each will be anough to get it done? I think after the rain pov, one storm (after the night and getting the mission), one gambit (his POV observing how the mission is proceeding to the point she gets injured), and then maybe one more short set from both for the final scene. That last set shouldn't take much at all as you can't really drag out a death for too long and make it plausible.
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:06:58 GMT -5
Makes sense that he would keep her at an arms distance, not showing his feelings too much out of fear of loosing her, since loosing his wife was so traumatic, he´d logically fear to go through this again...I´ll put this at the rest of the pov, just want to make sure of how the scene is going to be like first.^^
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:08:26 GMT -5
So he gets the mission the day after the night when she breaks down? Sounds good.
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Post by Bastet on Aug 3, 2006 0:11:21 GMT -5
So he gets the mission the day after the night when she breaks down? Sounds good. We could do that. I was thinking maybe he knew a little bit half way through the escapades but kept it to himself out of selfishnes. I think in this he's realizing that time marches on and wounds heal and no matter, what you can't stay in the past. He wants to stay in the same point with Ororo, not changing, but it's just not possible as it's more than just him at stake (i would think since the reason weapon x is hopping around is to right their own worlds, he has nothing to go back to in his world, hence the encouragement of the selfish motives). That was my idea of it but I"m not sold on it so if you want to go somewhere else, be my guest ;D
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:13:46 GMT -5
As I told you, not having the reference is difficult to know if I go for it or not...I like the idea, but let´s see how it plays out(there´s sooooo much drama already...hehehe)
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Post by Bastet on Aug 3, 2006 0:16:56 GMT -5
it is a drama fic... my problem is I can never give my characters ENOUGH drama. Gambit and Storm should have me arrested for assault and emotional distress.
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ladymacbeth
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:21:23 GMT -5
it is a drama fic... my problem is I can never give my characters ENOUGH drama. Gambit and Storm should have me arrested for assault and emotional distress. lol ;D We can always make something lighter after this one...Say...the harem fic, if Te actually gets away from our menacing grip
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Post by Bastet on Aug 3, 2006 0:22:46 GMT -5
i cannot believe she tossed that idea down! I mean, I don't know her schedule so she could be up to her eyeballs in miscellaneous crap but omg, it's the perfect jump start for her muse!
She would capture his devilish ideas, cause you know he would dive in head first like a pig in mud. And then the horror as he realizes he's overwhelmed, he is but one man in a sea of goddesses!
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 3, 2006 0:25:48 GMT -5
A man in a sea of godesses...Talk about dream turned nightmare...Maybe we could get Ace to do it(I´d do it myself...but I suck at humourous/witty fics)
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