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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:12:38 GMT -5
I'd still ilke to read what you have if you don't mind ;D snippets keep me going- lol
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:17:22 GMT -5
Meh...I´m kinda working on it right now...Remeber that bit when Gambit returns to the house after the rain...I´m trying to show him slowly finding the differences between the two of them and starting to show that even if his still in love with his wife he is starting to care for storm, and separate her from his fantasies...and starting to wonder if he could be in love with to people at the same or if his feelings for storm are part that she reminds him of his wife and part that he cares for her in an almost paternal way...It´s complicated...Like headache inducing complicated...
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:20:21 GMT -5
if you need suggestions, seriously, I'll help- no melodrama. Cross my heart, hope to die. I'll get in 'uber anaytical mode' for ya
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:25:36 GMT -5
About that first pov...and her whole being naked...I felt at this stage he could be more annoyed than aroused...that´s why I don´t make any mentions...He sees her like a kid, because he´s still too filled with memories of his wife who is, in his mind, much more of a woman than teen Ororo is...Then he would be aroused by the physical similarities between them(first night scene) and only after start seeing her own actratives...Dunno...I´m still a little...meh...
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:28:34 GMT -5
possible inspirational songs:
"tell her tonight" by franz ferdinand (upbeat but applies) "Darts of Pleasure" "total eclipse of the heart" bonnie tyler (classic cheese!) "a girl like you" by Edwyn Collins (best known from Empire Records) "she's always a woman" by billy joel
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:30:06 GMT -5
About that first pov...and her whole being naked...I felt at this stage he could be more annoyed than aroused...that´s why I don´t make any mentions...He sees her like a kid, because he´s still too filled with memories of his wife who is, in his mind, much more of a woman than teen Ororo is...Then he would be aroused by the physical similarities between them(first night scene) and only after start seeing her own actratives...Dunno...I´m still a little...meh... right, but I think you should still put that reaction in (the annoyance), because the reader will want to know, wtf, he didn't even mention it? she's running around like a street urchin and OBVIOUSLY something is up. It's a snap from her original reactions to him- she's reaching out to be his friend (outwardly). omg- i'm at 301 posts... go fig
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:34:38 GMT -5
I will...But as I told you it has been hard on me this fic...This is the most bizarre situation I had to put myself into to try to get the character´s reaction...
Oh, and about not putting our names in it to trick Niena...I guess is a good idea...at least she won´t harm the story if she has a personal vendetta against me(I still wonder why singling me out...In the group fics there were plenty of talented people she could get jealous of...Maybe it was because she feels I didn´t follow her advice-at least she said that in that damned review of hers...)
I still have to leave a review on Brandon´s stuff^^
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:38:16 GMT -5
I´ll go through the entire fic again and reread my povs, change/correct stuff... I´m beating myself over this...you have no idea...I´m like...nothing is ever good enough(that´s my opinion on myself, I´m not complaining about you, you´ve been extremely pacient), sometimes I feel the urge to just delete everything and start it over again(which is what I do when I start to trip on my own legs too much, like I´m doing now^^)
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:39:17 GMT -5
I will...But as I told you it has been hard on me this fic...This is the most bizarre situation I had to put myself into to try to get the character´s reaction... Oh, and about not putting our names in it to trick Niena...I guess is a good idea...at least she won´t harm the story if she has a personal vendetta against me(I still wonder why singling me out...In the group fics there were plenty of talented people she could get jealous of...Maybe it was because she feels I didn´t follow her advice-at least she said that in that damned review of hers...) I still have to leave a review on Brandon´s stuff^^ I say just leave it off the first chapter, and after that, put our names on it. She doesn't like me much either but is just a brat when it comes to you (hence the jealousy theory). You're a superb talent with your fics, LM. I'm jetting off to the store now- see you in a half hour- take care, ok? Don't fret over the fic- we got a ton of it under our belt and we're at the mercy of the US post office right now (which doesn't leave a lot of hope- lmao!)
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 22:40:58 GMT -5
I´ll go through the entire fic again and reread my povs, change/correct stuff... I´m beating myself over this...you have no idea...I´m like...nothing is ever good enough(that´s my opinion on myself, I´m not complaining about you, you´ve been extremely pacient), sometimes I feel the urge to just delete everything and start it over again(which is what I do when I start to trip on my own legs too much, like I´m doing now^^) DO NOT DELETE! You are only allowed to ADD or at worst, modify with a thesaurus. To remove what you have written would be a travesty and I would never forgive you. I'll vitually egg your virtual house while hyped up on virtual iced caps- i'm THAT insistant! I hope my suggestions haven't meant you think I don't like your work- I have this horrid habit of coming across that way cause I nitpick eveyrthing (even my own. I"m too lazy to reboot my storm, hence why i'm not even trying to completely rewrite)
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:42:11 GMT -5
Ok, I´m going offline to work on the fic...see ya soon
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 22:45:39 GMT -5
DO NOT DELETE! You are only allowed to ADD or at worst, modify with a thesaurus. To remove what you have written would be a travesty and I would never forgive you. I'll vitually egg your virtual house while hyped up on virtual iced caps- i'm THAT insistant! I hope my suggestions haven't meant you think I don't like your work- I have this horrid habit of coming across that way cause I nitpick eveyrthing (even my own. I"m too lazy to reboot my storm, hence why i'm not even trying to completely rewrite)[/quote] Don´t worry, I tend to be overdramatic when it comes to fics....I´ve destroyed dozens of pages at once because I dislike the final result...But I won´t do this with this one, since is not just mine...I´d never destroy our baby
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 23:45:01 GMT -5
okey dokey- keep me posted then
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ladymacbeth
Fabian Nicieza
The Sphinx Without a Secret
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Post by ladymacbeth on Aug 2, 2006 23:47:12 GMT -5
Hey there again, just send in the version with some edits(in red)
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Post by Bastet on Aug 2, 2006 23:50:55 GMT -5
woot! i'll read it up!
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